this is so cool! i like how you did the coloring .. it really makes the house look more dilapidated nd dirty .. i noticed you had a couple of grammar nd spelling errors, you should do the spellcheck but you wrote a really cool description
Fantastic work, very gritty and atmospheric! A nice introduction to the story. I see that you made a few spelling errors in the text... while I'm not flawless with English too, I could give you some hints -- do you want that?